Monday, September 22, 2014

Voice Week Day 1: Bryce

My very kind friend reminded me that I had signed up for Voice Week. So I'm posting this really last minute. ^ ^'
In Voice Week, you post a small bit from the point of view of a different character doing a scene each day for five days to try to strengthen the voice of each character. The voice is the individual thought pattern of the character and how they see the world.

Post number one will be Bryce from my science-fiction series Subsapien. I will post with snippets of Matt, Ingrid, Emil, and Brian too over the week. :)

Bryce

Bryce’s handler set a plastic bowl holding three balls of white on the foam floor of the test room. The door shut again.

Bryce swished his furry, spotted tail. What was that? Would it hurt him? He crawled to the bowl and sniffed it. It smelled sweet and like milk. What should he do with it? He reached out his hand and touched the white stuff with his finger. It was cold, wet, and squishy.

Some of it got on his finger!

He wiped it off frantically on the floor and scrambled back. Was it poison? Was it going to blow up?


What do you think of the excerpt? Have you done Voice Week? Links?

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16 comments:

  1. So far, Bryce sounds like the original scaredy-cat. Can't wait to see some other angles on this.

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    1. Sort of. It's really hard showing more sides of him in such a short bit. ^_^' I may revise it and make it a little longer.

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  2. Nice! I have a question, though. Why the quotation marks? They confused me a bit, as I was expecting the first line to be dialog.

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    1. Thanks. They were a formatting thing. I thought it would make the bit stand out more in the post since it looked muddled without. I guess I'll get rid of them. :P

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  3. You captured his unease quite nicely.

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  4. Very interesting and different. Bryce could be a mutant or from another world. I like how you brought his fears and uncertainty to life.

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    1. Thank you. :) You're close. ;) He's definitely not normal.

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  5. Ooh, poor Bryce. Personally, the picture kind of confused me because I think I'd have had a very different view f Bryce without it. But I love how you put us right in his head and showed his layers of worry.

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    1. I see. That's my drawing of him. It's hard to get all of his aspects in this little snippet. ^ ^' Thank you. :)

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  6. You captured the tentativeness of a cat very well. A feline with human thought, I like it.

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    1. Thanks. ^ ^' He's not a cat though. Close. ;) Thank you for commenting. :)

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  7. A cat-human? Less intelligent than a human, but thoughtful nonetheless. An interesting character!

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    1. Sort of, but I'm glad you get the gist. ^ ^' Thank you. ^ ^ And thank you for commenting. :)

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  8. I love this innocent, instinctual voice. This concept seems so cool, I can't wait to learn more about it. Just the word "subsapien" has nabbed my attention.

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    1. Thank you. :) I have lots of information about the project scattered around the blog. Thank you for commenting. :)

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